Talk:British Revenge/@comment-3443450-20130820140056

Good page so far, only a couple grammar mistakes that you missed. May I suggest (You don't have to just trying to help you out :P) That maybe you take out the British Revenge Begins and British Revenge Continues paragraphs (or keep them), and add a story about adventures the guild has had. Or maybe even expand the two paragraphs and make them both their own mini stories. Again, you don't have too, just thought if you wanted to expand upon the page a little