Talk:POTCO: Escaping the Void/@comment-3112181-20140103195316

So far, I can't say I'm loving it. The characters are weak and underdeveloped; the plot is shifting and needs some dire attention. I must applaud you, however, on your bold choice of symbolism in having the sky's overcast spectre represent the protagonist's failed chance at redemption and subsequent emotional downfall. And do I dare spot an smudge of personification in the father's mishandling of the town's fruit tree? Well done! But as I said, it's still a little rough around the edges and is in desperate need of a synopsis overhaul.